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Last Train

Autumn rain at the midnight hour,
I wait for you,
Ghosts of the past pleading for me to leave,
But I am shackled by the thought of you,
The world begrudge,
The last train awaits,
I wait,
But the chains of society have become too heavy for you,
So a visit from sacrifice,
That gifted you fear,
Has caused you to forget my name,
So I journey towards my fate,
Alone and nameless,
My heart betrayed.

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Free verse
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Nice write
There are some tenses that need corrections because you used narrative technique.

You're on the track...

"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."

Thx for the feedback! :)

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I am not certain of the direct meaning of the poem, but the language is sobering, and sad. The last three lines are especially somber, and along with the title, leave a feeling of grief and loss.
Thank you,
L

Thx :)

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