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LAST TRACES

Nothing left but an old well
just off a dim road overgrown
to hint where others used to dwell
and tend the crops that they had sown

Where once fields grew and a home stood
this hole is all that's left
all overcome by hoary wood
of all but wanderers bereft

Whose forefathers worked this land
such a long, long time ago ?
where the tall pine trees now stand
I guess I'll never know

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an archaeologist's dream and an anthropologist's challenge. But the layperson too does receive a beckoning from the voices of our collective past, whispering in the winds and guarded by the seasons. I guess we will never know everything. But it links us somehow and provides a continuity - thus having received the baton we run with it and pass it to the next generation into posterity.

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'Break, break break on thy cold grey stones, O Sea.'

while hoping we leave more than forgotten traces when we are gone. Very good of you to come by and comment..............scribbler

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I am trying to write Some poems that don't ramble on so much( not always successful though lol). Always good to hear from site's newest fiance...........................stan

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you may be remembering " Crumbled Bricks ", "forgotten dreams", from here or "Homeplace" from old site. I find myself drawn to this theme occasionally lol.If not , Do post the one that's niggling at your memory....................stan

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yet another write which is testimony of your compassionate and empathetic heart...

warmly..

raj (sublime_ocean)

thank you raj. I expect it takes one to know one.....................stan

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