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last dance (by: eddy styx)

hush...
can you hear it?
take a deep breath
hold it, now listen...
if you can hear
past the thudding
of your own heart...
put the palm of your hand
lightly but firmly to your chest.
now, put your hand to mine,
feel the difference in intensity?
the slow steady beat
like the ticking
of a grand clock...
winding down.
now meet my eyes
as my blade slides
between your beautiful ribs...
my dead heart quickens,
at the intake of
your last vanishing breath
and I ease your spent body
languidly to the ground.

*eddy styx is my malevolent male alter ego who writes dark poetry

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Explicit Content

Comments

Oh my, I have missed eddie he is such a bad ass, this is fantastic and so clever I could feel myself leaning in
The last dance indeed.

I like writing dark stuff but people ask if I'm depressed lol so I always explain no it's just my love of creativity. now I know I have to find a muse with a name and introduce much like you have. I adore this dark twisted tale and the end just makes this perfect. You have inspired much of my dark stuff and I hope you get to read some.

Thank you...Teddy

having an alter ego is great for freeing the imagination! it helps a person to step out of themselves and write creatively. you find that you see things in a new light, or should I say a new darkness, LOL!

ever, eddy
always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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cat,

I like the pacing of this. There is a certain attentive and measured quality to eddy's instructions. Can I call it romantic?

raffy

thank you for telling me what you liked about my poem, I appreciate it greatly!

ever, eddy
always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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as anticipated your alter ego is back and with a pretty dark poem which creates the effect (horrific)...

always a lesson to read your poems...

be well...hugs..

raj (sublime_ocean)

it is always a great pleasure to have a visit from you! thank you.

ever, eddy
always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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