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Language Barriers...

Trying to make sense of the mess
Sort through the language debris
Take words fired shotgun style
Try making it clear to thee

Poetry is a careful art
not just splashes of paint
Lines just a bunch of ideas
chaos is what it ain't

Throwing words at the page
doesn't make it good
If anyone could do it
then everbody would

Tired of the breakdowns
twists and turns of expression
It's getting too much for me
I'm having a bit of depression

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

good title! to tell you the truth...I feel the same...there times when I just can't take it anymore :(
I couldn't have said it as eloquently as you have.

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

As of late I've taken a shine to African poetry,
well, I say "African poetry" but what I reeeaaaly mean
is something akin to Pidgin English,
wherebys I gets to use mi noggin
to werks it out!

Piano:
"Old man in my house;
you hit him white teeth, he laugh.
You hit him black teeth, he cry.".

Obi.

entirely welcome to take on the ones that are left over! Cat and I could use a bit more help in commenting and critiquing them. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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I am gearing up to do just that ... need my coffee first lol!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Hoping to get some help. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

is this about trying to make sense of poetry when the writer isn't clear in their direction or approach?

If it is I fully understand. I read some poems, think it must be being stupid for not getting it. I then attempt to critique & fail at the first hurdle for my own misunderstanding.

I'm no genius but thought I was clever enough to make sense of some written poetry. Clearly I'm not as clever as I thought.

Enjoyed your poem & I understood the words but it will be ironic if I have misunderstood your meaning & theme.

regards

One

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

clear in the direction or approach, that is one thing, but when a writer fires words at the page with no clear understanding of the word itself, combines it with no obvious direction and a bit of pidgin English, it can be absolutely crazy. Reading some of these works, and I do mean works, [for they are obiviously worked at] can be frustrating. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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