Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

The Lamb Of God

Submitted by Edna Sweetlove on Sat, 2020-05-09 13:52

Hie thee to a field and get thyself a lamb
And slit its poor furry ovine throat
Let us sing "O Lamb of God", a sacrifice so cute,
Fresh slaughtered just for us, and so tasty to boot.

Lamb served with roasted spuds, that's a metaphor so fine
And maybe cauliflower au gratin and some nice red wine.
Oy! Excuse me waiter! I'll have a huge bleeding thick slice
My poor soul is starving, and it smells fucking nice.

We must be real grateful; let's get down on our knees;
We're so sodding hungrym so give us seconds, please.
And thus our hymn is ended; the sacrificial lamb
Is in our fat guts so we're feeling really grand.

So ends my recipe for a holy dinner
And we all know it's a sure-fire winner;
So praise your greedy god and pray your futile hates
While the poor of the world stare at their empty plates.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
We rationalists can play at metaphors too.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

Comments

Geezer

Sat, 2020-05-09 14:00

Geezer's picture
Volunteer badge

to a Hindu, [whilst eating a thick juicy burger, that would feed a family of skinny Englishmen,] "Hey this cow was eating all your veggies, so I took care of it for you." ~ Geezer.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Edna Sweetlove

Sat, 2020-05-09 16:49

Edna Sweetlove's picture

...not many "skinny Engishmen" these days. Many eat hideous American-style hamburgers and grease-covered chips and tomato sauce. Many eat other utterly disgusting things (too horrid even to mention) and we have an obesity problem here in England - of course it's not on the same scale as in the USA, but many are getting there. I love the American TV show "My 600 pound life" which shows monstrous people stuffing their faces. But I digress.

Cows have a good time of it in Hindu countries. But you can't beat a nice beef curry.
.

xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

author comment

Geezer

Sat, 2020-05-09 17:49

Geezer's picture
Volunteer badge

to the world of the poor? There must still be some in England. Else, how would you know of poor people? ~ Geezer.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Edna Sweetlove

Sun, 2020-05-10 11:35

Edna Sweetlove's picture

...there are still many poor people in GB, in part thanks to the nastiness of the Conservative governments of the last 10 years. Coronaviris will make it worse. Britain is now the sick man of Europe - more C19 cases than anywhere else on Earth (Except of course for Trump's USA which is outkilling everyone).

Ps I am grateful for your comments. No one else bothers which bodes ill in general.
.

xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.