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THE LABYRINTH - First published in May 2009

Even in my most
conscious moment,
there’s part of me
that’s still asleep
Even in my most
joyous moment,
there’s part of me
that’s sorrowful
Even in my most
magnanimous moment,
there’s part of me
that’s still unkind
Even in my most
enlightened moment,
there’s part of me
that’s hard to find
Even in my highest
moment of confidence
there’s part of me
that’s still in doubt
Even in my highest
moment of clarity
there’s part of me
that’s still confused
Even in my most
pleasurable moment,
there’s part of me
that’s still in pain
Even in my highest
moment of truth,
there’s part of me
that lives a lie
Even in my most
forgiving moment,
there’s part of me
that’s unforgiving
Even in my most
patient moment,
there’s part of me
that’s always hurried
Even in my most
serene moment
there is part of me
that’s in conflict
Even in my most
peaceful moment,
there’s part of me
that’s still at war
Even in my most
lived moment
there is part of me
that wants to die
Even in my most
liberated moment,
there’s part of me
that’s still a slave

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Comments

and nicely written,
but I'm afraid the formula becomes just a tad too repetitive to my taste.

cheers,
Jess
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As you can see, I wrote it a long time ago. I am aware of the repetitiveness but, I thought that the repetitiveness would give it the force I wanted it to have,

Cheers

Leonard Daranjo

"When the waiting stops, the living begins"

author comment

No one is perfect and there are always two sides to a coin which is nicely brought out by you. I do agree with Jess about repetitiveness, would be nice if you can work on that without compromising on the essence.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks once again. As you can see from my comment to Jess, the repetitiveness was deliberate.

Cheers

Leonard Daranjo

"When the waiting stops, the living begins"

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