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LA PETITE MORT [ English]

Submitted by Geremia on Mon, 2015-12-21 09:32

LA PETITE MORT
[English]

I feel my life force begin to weaken
a flickering flame on a candle
and my spirit resists a surrender
to an undetermined disconnect
not of its knowing.
my mind is clear to what
my heart will not see...
and my soul sorrows
for the pity of it all.

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alidzain

Mon, 2015-12-21 10:37

alidzain's picture

I feel the struggle.

Alid

Geremia

Mon, 2015-12-21 10:46

Geremia's picture

Yes, Alid, every day. Thanks, my friend.

joe

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alidzain

Mon, 2015-12-21 12:45

alidzain's picture

I know pain
it can drive you insane.
Devoid of comfort,
forced to face the hurt.
You wait for it to end,
its a matter of when
but it stretched forever
and ever and ever..

Alid

Geremia

Mon, 2015-12-21 13:13

Geremia's picture

...through time eternal,,,

God have mercy on us all

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Esker

Thu, 2015-12-24 07:35

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that U go through this...and your work is vivid of the descripts of what it is
doing....our mortality and humanity..great poetry!!

thank U

Geremia

Thu, 2015-12-24 08:52

Geremia's picture

Thanks, Steven. I am an oxymoron/
joe

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