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know to unknow, the mystery of Stars

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lamenting starlight
shines reflecting,
a polar of others 
unwelcome vim

When soft breezes
Brush my face
I want to know
that unpolluted
celestial objects
will reflect
from your eyes

I need to know
across a chasm
of time, a smile
of tranquility
will greet me

I know none that
will cross rivers
of sweet dream pools
Lapping loveliness,
Moments and minutes
have Channels routed
to blind the soul

as I walk through
forests of shadow
leaves become
still life, upon
my downed breast

I am adrift in
lingered lightning
atoms of the universe
will forever sing in me,
as known as time
as free as death
as I am of the sea

Songs lament
Sadness repents
and no tomorrows
never more promised
darkness unstated nature
that light would hide fear
as darkness cradles
Courage

As sunlight
shows me times day
the night
unveils timeless stars

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Dedicated to Lonnie and Chrys .. with much love xox
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Comments

This is a masterful blend of reality, fancy, and pure dream! You words are like fairy music that echoes in the ear long after it is heard, and you message is poignancy personified! Loved this one!

your poetry is like golden beads
strung
but played like a violin
by maestros indeed

just tell me when will I reach
that pedestal
where the Statue of Liberty stands
in our USA

but you are far from
Down Under
still unexplored
but some day If the Lord wishes
I shall fly and meet you Jayne

But can't promise today
I am partially blind
what a shame
and
deaf as a stone
at times in one ear
but music still rhymes
in the other

Just tell me where you live
I may gather the strength
to fly to the land of Aussies
but alas!
not in vain!

A drift from the Spirit world to reality, as star dust is mythical, to the stardust sprinkled among those that dwell in that other state, this piece drifts among the thoughts of many.
It is great that you can now walk within your ways and write about them with a kind of logic.
Keep it up young author,
Yours as always, thinking with you, Da xxx

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I am really envious of the way you brings out the imagery in each of your poem. This is mesmerizing, wonderful, artistic and helluva poem, dear. love your style, your choice of words. Your honesty, your sharing of feelings, your story. You're the kind of poet who really inspires others and I'm grateful and very appreciative of poetry all the more because of you. sigh..
Will I ever be able to write like you and inspire others like you do? I wish I could. I really do.

Reborn

Always looking forward
to the gems that you share.
Heart beating with anticipation
to see the soul you laid bare.

The essence of self
which bless me with light,
the touch that burns passion
and send me soaring
to new heights.

I tasted ecstasy
in the swirl of emotions.
A feeling beyond words.
A sense of freedom.

For in your gifts of words,
I find myself, a humbled man,
reborn again and again
with the will to strive
until the end.

Bless you, Jayne
Thank you for sharing, for inspiring
lots of love and hugs
from Alid

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