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kid man!

Submitted by loved on Wed, 2014-01-29 14:20

Do you all know,
one day yet
to one's birthday
one is a child
and
a day after the 18th birthday
one becomes a man(woman)

now tell me
a crime committed on a day
short of 18
one is dealt with
like one was a kid
and
a day after he cuts the eighteenth slice
he becomes a man

then what is his position
as he cuts the cake
and
pierces his ex

will you treat him
as a man
o tell me
fair man!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Seren

Thu, 2014-01-30 08:50

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If he's cutting the cake he's already there, in my world we don't cut cakes until we are that age so he would be a man in my eyes,

I get the feeling that this was a comment am I right ?

love JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Thu, 2014-01-30 09:15

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a legal interpretation of sorts
asked by a fan
from across
thanks

loved

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Seren

Thu, 2014-01-30 09:18

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Aren't a lot of poems wild thoughts? smile

JC x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Thu, 2014-01-30 12:13

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aren't most poets wild?
smiles to u too!

loved

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Seren

Fri, 2014-01-31 08:33

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Even bigger smile, I was a wild child once upon a time.

love JC x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Fri, 2014-01-31 10:03

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even now a
WILDERNESS
CHILD

loved

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