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Khaki Rainbows

Submitted by BettyBuff on Thu, 2013-01-24 03:36

Thunderous sprays of Khaki
Rainbows
smeared
my view today

The unremitting gloom
of Shetland skies
scurried over
Viking island
rooms

No romance bestowed
in Nordic skies
No ancient runes
bestowing order
and chance allowed

The pig squeal
of wipers on windscreens
like balloons squashed
on silica

Crashing through the
drear dry dock
a caught chain
crusting with ferrous
markings

like a ghost snake
wrapped around
the fisher mans catch

Waiting valiantly
quayside
the ferry bobbing
carrying
her human cargo
umbilically
to Scotland

Nearer to Stavanger
than London
these daily commutes
challenging
in winters wasting wrasps

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-01-24 04:03

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Damned good eyesight there gal, watching that ferry from Southampton lol
Loved the write, had a lovely feel about it, joining those places with us all, Yours Ian.T

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Seren

Thu, 2013-01-24 04:10

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You made a dreary scene seem hauntingly beautiful ... I cant see anything to change or add

Brava

Jayne-Chloe xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

BettyBuff

Thu, 2013-01-24 04:11

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Thank you for that...

Ells xx

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BettyBuff

Thu, 2013-01-24 04:11

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Hi Ian,

Thanks....my mum's a Scot....have been dragged up there visiting relatives. Enough said! LOL Actually, it has a stark beauty but in winter, I can't imagine a more godforsaken place to travel to.

Ells :)

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-01-24 16:56

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We were going to swap houses for one in Shetland a few years ago but chickened out lol. Love the stories of Scotland though, Yours Ian.T
PS:- I have my Neopoet on 160 for the print size for reading I find it easier on the eyes..Not sure if you know that you can change the size of the print for reading lol it's on the right at the bottom just increase until its good for you..Have a great day...

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Frenchf

Thu, 2013-01-24 16:45

Lovely

Lamar Ingraham

Fri, 2017-04-28 18:26

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I salute you for your tenacity of purpose and outstanding leadership qualities. Thank you for your words of encouragement and support. I will remain forever grateful for your contributions to literature.

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