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keep posting some one may be reading ------damned

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2015-07-06 20:07

Time
ad infinitum
Man you talk of a time
ad infinitum
we will not be therein
then what cream
would you cherish
but simply white and human!
I wonder man
at least enjoy your today
when life came about
all was cold
now to heat we are becoming
touchy and bloody bold
what the hell
those who were iced
now enjoy heat- like
and
those like we two
only love to play
the politically poetic dice
the game of cats and mice
which is your side
for a ride?
AND
who’s going to throw the dice?
and who shall pay the price?

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Seren

Tue, 2015-07-07 01:06

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I'm reading keep writing my friend

if you take out the ego the words will flow

Ad infinitum

Love Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Tue, 2015-07-07 10:08

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how will it ever go ?
yet I flow
thanks let go!

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Seren

Tue, 2015-07-07 14:13

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Please DON'T use the Cancer word even worse you used it with regards to your ego ?

Tut tut ... J

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Tue, 2015-07-07 17:15

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can't separate it ever

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Seren

Tue, 2015-07-07 18:03

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What ever ? Really ?

Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

weirdelf

Tue, 2015-07-07 21:24

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for writing pseudo-profound crap poetry.
This is not a gem.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

lovedly

Wed, 2015-07-08 00:39

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i love gems tasty

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weirdelf

Wed, 2015-07-08 11:52

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Stop writing self-indulgent crap. Stop pleading for attention like an 8 year girl.
Write righting like the good poet you can be and everyone will stop taking you like a pathetic joke.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

lovedly

Wed, 2015-07-08 14:07

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Glycerine drops will not work
they are fake

these glycerine drops
will not work
they are fake
only on actor's screens they work

Tears just roll
as in love

no don't fake
em my love

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weirdelf

Wed, 2015-07-08 16:23

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obscure bullshit

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

lovedly

Wed, 2015-07-08 21:59

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medicine

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Seren

Thu, 2015-07-09 09:56

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Lovedly I will not ever haunt your page as your just plain cruel

And I wont become a clown in your circus anymore

But I know the show will go on

Your ego demands it

J

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Thu, 2015-07-09 11:30

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O what
ur a peach

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