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Keep My Faith In God
Ever since I met you
I could escape solitude
I miss your heart
My quest to reach you from afar
with my chest ablaze
I can handle saying your name
regardless of what they say
I see the sun brighter everyday
I put my soul into prayer
A connection with you later
As I held my breath
Nothing better than to rest
Thoughts to partake
To offer reason and a purpose
I must take this step, very urgent
Harmless conversation
reaching for my star every night
A silver I see in sight of everything
Even a storm until the daylight
Like a divine presence
Peircing my eyes looking up to Heaven
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Comments
Eden Guthrie
Thu, 2022-11-24 22:32
Great poem!!
This was really good! I loved the structure and the way it came together and it felt very vivid and loved the concept of using god. Overall 10/10