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Kaleidoscope

The kaleidoscope of events
was the life that passed
well planned strategies of life
that were expected to occur,
have fallen short of dreams
that were held while still
a bright eyed youth

To have thought that achievements
would come by simply working hard
then to realize
dreams are but made of vapors
which seem to pass like clouds
all that's left behind is the reality
of standing in the light

Then like a storm
the rain begins to pour
without a single cloud in the sky
the realization
that many seasons have gone by
since I thought the world was mine

Standing here
in the light of truth
which clearly shows what I've become
all my dreams have gone on rivers
floating off to the sea

Knowing now
what i have accomplished
truly
out weights all my dreams

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Free verse
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coming from you it mean a lot to me. yes we have been here a long time, i few of the people who where here when I first came are not around so often. I guess I'll have to hunt them down. you know weirdelf Jess have you seen him in your neck of the woods.
infinitedwarf was on facebook most resently, there a few other I have not seen. shit now I'm rambling. what have you done to me. Hahaha!
thanks for the high compliment, now I have to see if i can get my head out of my bed room. if I can't it's your fault.
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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I've applied some of the changes you suggested, we'll see how it works, to me it's like that first stanza lost a little of it's tempo. we'll just leave it to the readers.
thank you so very much any help is always appreciated.
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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Dreams are definitely ephemeral as clouds, but the rain is real as can be. I felt this one because I have lived it as so well described.

Well done.

Victor

Two grammatical things:

"The kaleidoscope of events
which was (were) the life that passed
the well planned strategies of a life
which was (were) expected to occur

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

I made changes from the suggestions of alma and you, let me know what you think
thank you for taking the time to read it carefully.
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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that one is mine also, because it's really the tears we shed over loss Dreams.
the old Marlon Brandon line from the movie (on the water front)
line: "I could have been a contender"
thanks for the "Brillant write"
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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