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Just in a moment

Just in a moment
our driver turned right
a car following at jet speed
overtook him,
Wow just slight...

Heaven knows why
the other guy
was over speeding

Maybe he had an appointment
Dating his gal in heaven
he would have had us as company

four hoping and laughing happily
post a dry run nice dinner

But at that instant moment
our driver had maintained
his mental presence
else NEO
would have been busy
posting an Obituary

but as one guy always keeps telling here
no one will ever miss you my dear
Neo it’s Okay
but 1000 who read me on other sites
won't say
petulant guy!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I liked the story, but then you dropped on the gossip level and started talking about some issues with Neo. My friend, poetising your trubbles sometimes makes them stronger.
Relax and write your story for me as if I live on another planet and in another time. Choose which one future, modern, Stone age whichever.
Looking forward to hearing from you


this is no story
this is the third
ACTUAL poetry of mine
in real life
first was
and now this
first two you must have missed
these were posted in stream
in neo

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you are so lucky if you had been here in this country you would have been totalled, see we drive on the left, if you think about it he would have hit us on the side.
Take care and look after you,
Yours Ian..

Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

the guy...
other one...
was flying like a jet flight
trying to gain momentum
along the normal road site
it's all over now
since have already passed
many a midnight
We have been saved an immortal
ICU plight!

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