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Just Lend Me

Your eyes
your vision
your shyness
okay coyness
one I may see a face full of smiles
that gives thee
an immense glee

then upon your eyebrows
plant a kiss before I flee
as you shower a basket full
of blush, as you fish for me

give me a smile
that I can hide
within the inner folds of all I desire
caged in my heart's corner for ever

just lend me the love
that you upon millions shower
O Lord of heavens who promotes
all love and inner volcanic fire
for those who love your form entire

and not only in dreams at night
they with exhilaration of happiness also perspire
as you show your inner self
only to those O Lord
who you alone admire

Lend me thy form for just a moment
it's just my wish my burning desire

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something going, right off the bat, then I kind of lost it after " just lend me the love, that you upon millions, shower". The last two lines are the best after that. Who wouldn't love to be a god, for at least one day? ~ Geezer.
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