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just a comparison

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2014-08-26 22:02

compare

Life with seasons

Intelligence with common sense

Humans with animals

and

Rivers with life's sojourn

we come
to go
and
then
merge with the bigger one

we resurrect
as vapours
back to heaven
after life goes passed
half past seven

why half past seven?

well that's my rising time
each day
until I pass away!'
one day.....

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Wed, 2014-08-27 12:38

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I was reading and comparing
when I came through the
"half past seven"
then while asking why half past seven
You gave the answer
and it was really pleasant to know the reason.
Your raising time ha?

Amazing!
I really like this one.

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lovedly

Wed, 2014-08-27 15:44

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u got the message right
but glad u did not say rising
and all should keep it a secret
thanks rula

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