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Just across the ocean

Submitted by loved on Wed, 2012-09-26 07:50

I always wondered friend,
where you had gone into
hibernation of silence
even though you do love
most of mine
this one I just a while ago,
composed at a friend’s place,
the time was up
but I couldn't edit it.

Now you choose to comment on it
with your lovely sentiment...
Lovedly one
Not many, rather any know me,

nor will you ever too,
but on the first day of each month,
I do remember you.

friendly friends did you read my poem
Hello Calling London
over 1700 reads by now I think

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Wed, 2012-09-26 18:38

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"London here".. this old city has seen the ages of man and sometimes gave out the wrong impression to the world, but sit a while and think of what we have given.
I sit here renewed by some fancy games the golden streets have been sold and I cry for humanity, in the thoughts that the real people think, are carried the hope that the world will be a better place, even if there are some that cannot rest.
They should put away the guns, and bad words should be stored in deep vaults for ever and there in the new sunrise they should look and see each other with the eyes of unconditional love, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Wed, 2012-09-26 23:36

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but what about the write
You haven't said a word yet this time
Thanks for helping me abandon my permanent domain
should i visit again???
! the unread briefs,
nay yet unseen

loved

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Ian.T

Thu, 2012-09-27 03:49

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this seemed more of a question than a poem, to which London replied, I was not sure otherwise what the theme and form were lol. You take care,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2012-09-27 04:57

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seen

loved

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