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Jerry, In Memory

Submitted by Rett on Thu, 2011-01-27 11:26

You were mean as home made sin
Whipped my ass time and again
Then you'd tell mama a lie

The Aunt Jenny Hammond's place
Tollie's peg leg made my heart race
Jumped out the back door to land on a jar

Split my foot from heel to toe
Dad rendered you a hell of a blow
And I still have the scar

Taught me to swim in the old creek
Threw me in, laughed till you were weak
Back in the woods by the old sand bar

Doing homework late at night
Taught me how to read and write
And if I failed, get back up and try

Showed me pictures in his racy books
Amazed at how a woman looks
How time just seems to fly

It was hard to see you down
Harder yet putting you in the ground
With my heart about to break

I said goodbye, I said so long
Memories of you still running strong
An emptiness I'll never shake

Jerry Earl Wiginton
Laid to rest January 22nd, 2011
Rest in peace bro. I'll miss you.

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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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Normally, I want harsh critique, just too raw at this time for it. Thank you.
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Roscoe Lane

Thu, 2011-01-27 12:00

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This is not to critique though i find little wrong with this poem, i just want to pass on my condolences to you and your family. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Kailashana2

Thu, 2011-01-27 12:35

Me too, ((((((Rett))))). My eyes haven't filled with tears for a long time.

~A

themoonman

Thu, 2011-01-27 15:30

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I'm very sorry to hear about your brother ... not much
can be said except that we are here for you and your
family.

deepest regards,
Richard

Hooded Stranger

Thu, 2011-01-27 16:16

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Rett,

a wonderful tribute my friend,

HS

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pleiades

Thu, 2011-01-27 18:50

i smiled at your memories,
and my eyes filled as i came to the
last lines

a moving tribute

my sincere condolences for your loss

p

Blue_Halcyon

Thu, 2011-01-27 18:18

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This absolutely needs no critique to begin with anyhow! The poem made me cry. An excellent tribute to a loved family member.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Geezer

Fri, 2011-01-28 11:29

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him now. Laughing, and telling you that you shouldn't have tears for him. [Although he would secretly be proud,] to know that you have written a great tribute. My condolences, ~ Gee

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Rett

Mon, 2012-06-04 00:31

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I haven't been able to revisit this since I posted it. It has taken me time to come to grips with it. I appreciate you all

Respectfully,
Rett
"If all printers were determined not to print anything till they were sure it would offend nobody, there would be very little printed. " Ben Franklin

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Ian.T

Mon, 2012-06-04 05:14

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This is a lovely piece, and he will love it as you call his name.
It is our way of life now as we reach for the Winter, and the last two years have brought a lot of things home, as we have let go of so many loved ones.
Your Brother "Jerry", my brothers "Gordon" and "Gerald", and our Sister "Edna", and last week we said farewell to our Sister in law, "Iris.".and Brother in laws "Robert" and "Geoff" left last year also
Time moves us through territory that we would rather miss but it is our journey, we are joined by so many things.
I send you the memory of his smile that will bring you a smile from within..
The tears inside will stop, I know, just a question of when..
You take care young Rett, and know that we are here with you,
Yours, Ian..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Rett

Mon, 2012-06-04 12:04

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My condolences to you and the family members. Yep, as we reach the winter, we start losing those we love and soon will be reunited with them.

Respectfully,
Rett
"If all printers were determined not to print anything till they were sure it would offend nobody, there would be very little printed. " Ben Franklin

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