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Jealousy What ?(Idle Time Workshop 2)

Your sister is beautiful
smart
talented
your brother is educated in his field
handsome
and you my dear child
why you will make someone a good housewife one day
Say what now! a good what ?

years passed by she became a published author ,
why that is a nice hobby dear
ran her own business
why that is nice
and where is my beautiful sister
retired and happy she had her success and now lives quietly
my brother
well he was a mechanical draftsman but has since passed on
so I guess he is at peace
and the girl
well the rest is history folks
jealousy, envy anger
have no place in her life
any longer

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Hi, Chrys,
I sense the comparison through the years, and the strength and self-esteem coming to terms with all of it. Amen!
Thank you!
L

yes coming to terms is correct and thank you for reading

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a couple of times to make sense of the part where she ran her own business, because it was out of sequence, but once I got where the "beautiful one" was, then I got it. Yup, coming to terms with expectations. Jealousy is a hard topic. Good job. ~ Geez.
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thank you I will re read and see were you may have gotten stuck

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I read this and found it to be sad, I get the impression it was the mum speaking at the beginning, she saw the potential in two yet the third she saw house wife, nothing wrong with that, so yes excepting is very important in this piece because she, the girl was never jealous.

Thank you...Teddy

thank you it was written in retrospect through the eyes of the one that was told they would be the housewife and no not the mother but the father
and this is a true story but yes there was jealousy ,hurt and anger as good was never good enough no matter what they did

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I got that, it was just I saw the mother not the father saying about housewife. A really powerful write actually and thought provoking

Thank you...Teddy

I too had to read this a couple of time to sort out the genders till i figured it out....good work in sync with the prompt for the workshop..

be well..

raj (sublime_ocean)

thanks for the read isn't it strange how it turns out that the men that read this found it difficult to sort out not getting on any gender just an unusual observation

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Say what now, a good what?
This will make it stronger I feel my dear chrys

Thank you...Teddy

There ya go

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