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To Jayne With Love

Where are you old friend?
I missed your voice of late.
Your silence is stretching,
prolonging this long wait

I wished the best for you
in your health and wealth
that you'll finally come thru'
surviving the trials of fate.

You're the first to inspire me here
with your smooth-flowing poetry,
taking me to your world of wonders
and your thoughts full of honesty.

Your artistry never fails to amaze me,
always so beautiful and laden with emotion,
such astounding imagery which prompts me
to continue to seek my own improvement.

My dear, I am sending my prayers for you in the wind,
hoping that my angel will shine once again,
to walk by my side, letting your story unwinding,
but for now have your rest, old friend
till the time we'll be reunited again.

Love and hugs
from me to you.
Be well, friend
I say to you.

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A lovely write for our Jayne she will love the words and thoughts as always.
Thanks young Man, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

An honest expression of best wishes in verse.Nicely done..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you for the visit and the comment. I missed her dearly and I'm sure its the same for you. There's this feeling of lacking here which I can't explain. Its not just her, its Jess, Stan who are not well. I wished all of them will get better soon.

Alid

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Merited tribute Khalid.
Hope it would uplift Jane's spirits. Not saying I have ever doubted her courage.
Jane we missed your presence.
Be well dear
Khalid, thanks for sharing.

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Thanks for the visit and the comment.

Alid

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Forgive my lateness to your lovely poem I am touched and appreciate the thought, its really nice to know I am missed, I send you a heartfelt thank you and much love ...

Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

I'm recovering from surgery myself so I know how it feels. They just place the heart pacer in me. Now I'm taking my time to post my works. I bet it'll be a few more weeks before I post my poems. You tke care, dear.

With much love
Alid

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My goodness ! I hope your ok hun that's a serious condition, I am still recovering from the last and I am facing another one in just a few weeks time, I am tough though but there is only so much you can take sometimes, I can say I spent a lot of nights crying myself to sleep with the pain and that's with all the morphine, unfortunately my health issues will continue for a while yet the next operation will last around 12 hours and I will be kept in an induced sleep for the first couple of days and then they will gradually wake me up, I thought my last two were big but this ones a doozy, its just nice to get back here when I can as you must know, I miss you all to bits, you've been a part of my life for a long time and my life's been enriched enormously by the friends I have made here

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Mine is quite a rare condition. My heartbeat is 3x faster than the norm. It's not over yet. at least not until I can adapt to it. For now my sisters took turns to care for mum while I recover..The specialists have been recommending several other surgeries after they find internal organ deformities but I refused. Financial wise, they are too costly and for all the handicap, I've gotten used to them. Besides, my mum needs the money more than me. Sis, you're not the only one crying at night. I worry alot about the future and at times the pain is just too much. So you see, I know how crappy you must feel but I won't give in and I hope you won't either. Say, hun. ;Picture this when you are crying. I'm right there beside you, crying too. You're never alone.

Alid

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