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a jar of great magnitude

a half hinged
off plumb
ever-jamming
two handed yanker

and she still manages
a slam
on the way
out

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Brits, don't go there. It's American english, not British slang....I can hear your giggles already.
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Comments

Some women can slam a door with a hydalic closer attatched lol..............stan

they certainly can... and not metaphorically, or hyperbolically....

I still read your poems, and like most of them. I just find correspondence very tedious,,.so I don't !

thanks for the amusing comment on this piece. I wasn't sure if it was toooo cryptic ,( though not done purposely)

thanks,

Al

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Don't worry about commenting. I might have time to give comment to maybe 1 out of 4 poems I read and critique to maybe ten percent if I'm lucky lol................stan

lol - i was about to giggle when i read you comment, and then i giggled anyway

love it, and believe me - i have been known to slam a door or two in my time, and i'm little and not that strong either - we women just have a knack for it lol

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

liked what I read but was hoping for more, ie what happened next?

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