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Jai's Escapades

Jai the cat needed the car keys
her group of friends she had to please
away they went with her at the wheel
decided on Red Lobster for their meal

Had a few cocktails
let's say more than one
now it was time for a little fun
so they gave the dogs in the pick up
next to them a run
before they were able to start the race
a gang of bikers began to give chase

What manner of aliens might this be
said Jai "they look like a gang of chipmunks to me"
they're from another planet
I do so fear
these critters with their tattooed rear
brandishing guns strapped to their belly
what is that they're shooting
oh hell it's mint jelly

Zooming away in her little black ride
I owe them money
Jai grudgingly did confide
for tasty treats from my owner
that I could not bribe

Digging and searching for something with which to pay
Jai came across a can of monkey souffle
she flung it out the window
and she could her them say
"it's about time for a siesta"
as they went on their merry way

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I came across this poem my daughter and I wrote just for fun as we continue with isolation and covid 19 I thought we all would enjoy this
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a story as I have ever heard. I was right there and saw those bad-ass chipmunks chasing those kittys. Love the wild ending with the mint jelly and monkey soufflé. Sounds like fun! ~ Gee.
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Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

Thanks for the read yeah we had a lot of fun writing it . I thought it would lift people's spiriits some

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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