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It's hard to breathe

It's hard to breathe
When she
Does that thing
With her tongue and her thigh
At the same time.

I
Feel like gravity
Got away from me
I
Die

It’s hard to breathe when I
reply
With a sigh
And say “higher, harder”
And she does.
And I...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Explicit Content

Comments

this very suggestive piece is new and fresh and exciting! (without being obscene) I like it very much. I usually pick out my favorite lines of a poem, but I would not break this poem up as I loved the whole thing! very imaginative! I would gladly read more of your poetry...I will look for them in the "stream"

*hugs, Cat

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