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It's all blessings

when it rejoices
the sky brightens the drear hearts
with blessings and cheerful smiles

even when it cries
it showers the thirsty earth,
sometimes it rains frogs

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Two Haikus about rain .Do they work?
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Lovely to see you in the Haiku mood, though it is sometimes hard to keep the syllables count on line but the opinion is that western writers can have a little leeway with this,
I think that one of these would be a good addition to the Renga I have started for the UK but you are so very welcome to join us here,
My thoughts as always, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

thanks for your input and your thoughts. I intended 5-7-5 haikus but seems I missed the count in that line. It is not that I don't like yours but always prefer to know what is that wrong in my language usage , grammar ...etc. That helps me better.
Please I have edited and made sure that the syllable count is right and would like to hear again what you think of the edit.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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Your Haiku is top line and my bit was only a suggestion, your edit is perfect.
It is hard for us with our accents to write these things, they have always given the western world a bit of space and the syllable count is wavered a little.
Another facet that you have perfected,
Yours with many good thoughts, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Always appreciate your thoughts . Thanks for the visits.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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