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It's All About December ( December Weekly Contest)
Has old December entered yet,
dig into earth, when hibernate;
where the used-to-be nestling-birds
are flocking 'way for warmer worlds.
Has old December entered yet,
dig into the earth, when hibernate;
furry mammals, those walk on four,
are napping days, with no real chore.
Has old December entered yet,
dig into the earth, when hibernate;
where once warmed up and happy trees
now bid a colder, farewell leaves.
Has old December entered yet,
dig into the earth when hibernate;
where floral scents, we oft pursuit
sleep in bulbs, in magical mute.
Has old December entered yet,
Keep on going, don't hibernate.
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Structured: Western
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Jackweb
Thu, 2022-12-08 14:56
Sweet lyrics!
Honestly, i admire the repetition that flood round each line. It would be sweeter when a large group of people recite it. Then you will definitely smell the taste and the echo of this song. My credit to this piece is: A wonderful expression has appeared in the poet's pen.
A wonderfully thoughtful and charming pace. Depth of sound and form bloomed through writing.
I really like this line, " Has old December entered yet" Wonderful personification!
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Rula
Fri, 2022-12-09 03:12
Hello JackWeb
Thank you for the great review. It really made my day. Really appreciate the time you took to read and comment
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author commentLavender
Thu, 2022-12-08 17:49
It's All About December
Hello, Rula!
I enjoy your poetry for many reasons, one being that I am exposed to new forms! This is exceptional with rhyme and meter, along with the repetition of the first two lines. Four quatrains and a couplet - and an endearing theme, too. Lovely!
Thank you,
L
Rula
Fri, 2022-12-09 03:26
Dear Lavender
Thank you so much. I was aiming for a sonnet, but when I got four quatrains, I wasn't able to decide which one to give up. Consulting with my younger son, he assured I shouldn't leave any, so I think I've got here a new form especially with the refrain lines.
You don't know what it means to me to be read and commented on by the masters like yourself and the other fellow poets at Neo.
Always greatful dear.
Thank you
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author commentlovedly
Fri, 2022-12-09 08:06
Rula Come December one week is over
my pop was born over a century
in early December
my nephew was born in this very month
come mid December
I got my first job
also as then
waiting for Xmas now
then comes the end of another wonderful year..
now your poem must earn laurels
I don;t enter contests
So many like you are
so great
Rula
Fri, 2022-12-09 08:39
Thank you
Lovedly for your kindnesses.So December is a distinguished month for you. Hope you having great year.
thank you
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author commentlovedly
Fri, 2022-12-09 11:41
yeah may roll over
to meet next December
unless I get hypo thermia ooooooo lalalalaaaaaaa aaaaa.......
Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-12-09 10:36
“where floral scents, we oft
“where floral scents, we oft pursuit
sleep in bulbs, in magical mute.“
What an absolutely perfect line.
Tim
Rula
Sat, 2022-12-10 02:38
Hello Tim
Thank you so much for the time.
I almost share you in your time.
May I ask if you prefer this to read as a sonnet with three quatrains, if so which quatrain do you suggest to leave?
Again I very much appreciate your visit. Thank you.
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2022-12-10 08:03
I like it how it is
Unless you need it to be a “sonnet”, why change it? I think it’s great as is.
Tim
Rula
Sat, 2022-12-10 09:17
Appreciate it really
Thank you. I will keep it as is
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