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It’s My Life I Am Living.

Some say I should live
a different kind of way.
Drink and party more
find more time to play.
But I don’t want all that
I will do things my way.
It’s my life I am living
that’s how it will stay.

Others say, strive for better
to be like all the rest.
Have much more ambition
always try to be the best.
That’s not what I want
and isn’t how it will be.
It’s my life I am living
my life belongs to me.

As I get older, life’s too short
to be, who I don’t want to be.
I won’t be someone else
all I want is to be me.
Just to be true to myself
and let my spirit be free.
It’s my life I am living
So I will live it as me.

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i liked it! the form wasn't too solid, but that's all the criticism i've got. nice write!
always,
mag

Thank you Mag,
Tim

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but, me, I choose to grow old disgracefully! [grins]

cheers,
Jess
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Thanks for the comment Jess.
cheers,
Tim

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this is one of your best poems! I felt that this was written from a much younger point of view, [even after the line about getting older]. I do believe that it comes from the fact that you could have written it when you were very young and just didn't get around to it until a couple of years ago. Nice ! ~ Geezer

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Yes I must admit this does reflect on how I felt when I was younger as well as now.
Thanks for dropping by and commenting.
Tim

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I agree with Geezer - with the addition that it is really good rhyming and flowed nicely. :)

Love Mand xxx

Thank you Mand and thanks for dropping by again.
I really appreciate your encouragement.
take care,
Tim

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