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It’s My Life I Am Living.

Some say I should live
a different kind of way.
Drink and party more
find more time to play.
But I don’t want all that
I will do things my way.
It’s my life I am living
that’s how it will stay.

Others say, strive for better
to be like all the rest.
Have much more ambition
always try to be the best.
That’s not what I want
and isn’t how it will be.
It’s my life I am living
my life belongs to me.

As I get older, life’s too short
to be, who I don’t want to be.
I won’t be someone else
all I want is to be me.
Just to be true to myself
and let my spirit be free.
It’s my life I am living
So I will live it as me.

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i liked it! the form wasn't too solid, but that's all the criticism i've got. nice write!
always,
mag

Thank you Mag,
Tim

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but, me, I choose to grow old disgracefully! [grins]

cheers,
Jess
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Thanks for the comment Jess.
cheers,
Tim

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this is one of your best poems! I felt that this was written from a much younger point of view, [even after the line about getting older]. I do believe that it comes from the fact that you could have written it when you were very young and just didn't get around to it until a couple of years ago. Nice ! ~ Geezer

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Yes I must admit this does reflect on how I felt when I was younger as well as now.
Thanks for dropping by and commenting.
Tim

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I agree with Geezer - with the addition that it is really good rhyming and flowed nicely. :)

Love Mand xxx

Thank you Mand and thanks for dropping by again.
I really appreciate your encouragement.
take care,
Tim

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