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Invitation to Party at Killer's...

Killer's footsteps whispered softly
Anubis padded close behind
They're tired from their hunting
Their prey was hard to find

But their sack was full of meat
Stripped from a body warm
A bloody trail dripped to the street
Left behind... a broken form

The moon was full and yellow
Halloween is on the morrow
A party planned for friends and family
Chairs needed to be borrowed

The band was practicing their line-up
Some dirges after dark
Rock and Roll, and holiday tunes
A new one, Baby Shark!

Anticipation at its peak
Crypt-Keeper's got the spirit
The guest-list's just about full
Or pretty much, it's near it

A few ghosts of guests gone by
Esker, Ian and Lou
Rhett and Jess and Joe
Just to name a few

It's going to be a party
I can't wait to see
The "Wailing Walkers Band"
Old friends, and family

Oh, what fun we'll have
We've invited brand new peeps
We'll dance and eat and sing
Do "Charades" and the new game "Creeps!"

So, grab your favorite mask or face
You're invited once again
To Killer's Halloween party
Bring an umbrella in case of rain!

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Another great from the master! Looking forward to the sequel to this as Halloween gets closer.

~RoseBlack~

Of course there will be a sequel! ~ Geez.
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Hi, Geezer,
One of your best Killer poems! Great humor! Like RoseBlack, I'm looking forward to more...maybe reading about the actual party! (Is it Wailing Walkers or Wailin' Walker?)
Perfect invitation!
L

in honor of my wife and I's favorite program, "The Walking Dead." Of course, the party is going to be featured. You do know that I will try to include you? ~ Geez.
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Thanks for the invite! Let me know if there is anything I can bring - there are plenty of extra skeletons in my closet!
L

skeletons you like. They are always welcome, maybe for future use in a little blackmail. LoL ~ Geez.
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We could tighten a line or two up without really saying anything different. It’s not necessary. It’s better a little loose and relaxed.

and I do have a couple of places that I feel could be "tightened up". But the main thing is... You are formally invited to the resulting party and it is my fondest wish that you will appear in the cast at some point. If you have never read my poem about the last party that Killer had, I suggest you do so, so that you may decline the honor if you feel that it is too rough for you!
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/killer-halloween-0
~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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A beautiful lyrics! A delight to walk in the magic of your pen. A master is always a master!

Beautiful presentation!
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

I don't know about beautiful lyrics, but I guess they're fairly smooth. Thanks for the read and comments. ~ Geez.
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I also read the poem you referenced from last holiday. I saw the names of friends I miss. Moonman, who has passed and Lou, whom I used to converse and co-write poems with. one day she was just gone from my life, and I miss her and the rest. (Ian, who always had something pleasant to say...)

Your poem Is wonderful and stirs the imagination! each following line so rich with enticement and flavor. I don't see anything I would change.

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

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That poem was one that I did at an open mike night, [only one I ever did]. It got some pretty good applause after a poor start.
My phone has an alarm for my meds on it and it started going off after the first couple of lines, and there were a lot of people talking, after the alarm got their attention, and I managed to muffle it somewhat, people really listened. They even asked me if I had some more stuff! [I didn't think to bring anything else], and I wasn't savvy enough to use my phone. LoL. I only hope to match the script with this party and hope that I get as decent response as the first ever Killer Party. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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