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Invisible Walls

Hidden messages etched into the walls
I try to uncover, but the task proves a difficult feat
Years of wanting and waiting, hoping for enlightenment
Bruising the soul to nothing other than false contentment
It’s you, I know your tales of hardship
The battles you’ve faced moulding into this glorious form
Behind the mask, I see your troubles and fears
They only illuminate your rare beauty
And give thanks to this journey undergone

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of your theme. It seems to be they have many troubles behind them,
and are not so sure that they are clear of them yet. I see where one might think
that they feel the past is what their made them who they are, and they are okay with it.
Nothing I see to change, ~ Geezer.

Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

I like both the free verse and the lyrical poems. I love the themes of self awareness, growth, recognizing toxicity…it’s good to write about because the writing is a reaffirmation of these traits. Happiness is like playing guitar, it takes a lot of practice if you want to be any good at it. The first step is recognizing the things that make you unhappy and then attempting to remove yourself from those relationships or situations.

Super job as always,
Tim

Well deserved contest win.

Congrats!

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