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An Invisible Tale

I, the Fair Maiden

So weak and frail,
Trapped without hope of ever being freed

In a tower so tall
Even Rapunzel’s hair
Couldn’t ease my plight

Dark cold damp air
Sometimes, razor blade winds

Ravaged are my thoughts, stripped away
Naked and hollow

Echoes of loneliness bellowing through my ears
Whistling sorrow, as I lay

Sometimes I glimpse the shadow of my Dragon
furious eyes of yellow and green
although he’s blind

Fire enraged upon his breath

His serpent scales so big
Eating a banquet of the king’s feast, on one
Is all I can imagine

Sometimes I see him
Spreading his wings
Opening his very own
Book of hope

Swaying tail, as long as a corridor
That looks like an invite for escape?
My cold aching bones
Alas too weak to leave

Passing my open stone window

He flies, Into the black of night
Over the forest naked without light

Back home, to his very own Myth

And I, the Fair Maiden

I will never sleep tight

But I have hope
His cold blood will one day turn warm
Regaining his sight

To rescue me.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

a fairytale that transcends time...ageless! I pray your personal dragon does regain his sight and frees both you and himself! there is such depth to this piece!

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

I had a good feeling you would like this, I really appreciate your gorgeous review, there is indeed a deepness and I'm glad you saw it.
Your words mean so much my dear friend also to me.

Thank you...Teddy

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:) I loved it...tickled my fancy !

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

your tale--be it "invisable" or invisible is a wonderful story. Rapunzel, let down your hair so I may climb up to rescue you, the fair maiden. I love the dragon's entering the story; great imagination, wonderful story. Many years ago, when I traveled through much or Europe, I encountered a stone tower in Germany that was known as the Rapunzel Tower. I still have a photo of it that I wish I could post on this site--alas. But, truly fair maiden, I love your tale. Jerry

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How fun to visit rapunzel's tower, so cool. Thank you for your kind words.

Thank you...Teddy

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short concise lines, that tell the story without any extra thought. It seems that telling the story is the paramount thing here.
I think that we all have our personal dragons, except that many of us don't know it. Yours seems to be aware of you, just not inclined to help out, [blind, cold blood]. Nice job of bringing him to life for us. ~ Geez.
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You have managed to look deep into this, I adore dragons and stories of Fair maidens so I just thought I'd put something down for myself. Thank you Sir.

Thank you...Teddy

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