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Intrigue
If drops of blood shed were seeds
deserts would become rain forests
will the wars end then
or would trees then be the targets
to be felled in greed
because powers that be
hate green?
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Comments
Rula
Fri, 2018-05-18 14:29
succinct!
and as evocative as ever.
Great read dear raj.
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raj
Fri, 2018-05-18 14:36
Hi Rula
thanks for your encouraging and appreciative words. It is really intriguing isn't it that what will really end wars....i know the answer is may be never because it is all about an arms race and not arms in embrace...
I guess you may have ended your daily fast and had an evening feast...i think it's called iftihar? whatever...i really like the Firni ...i don't know if you guys make it....it is a sweet set & served in earthen cups....i love it...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Fri, 2018-05-18 14:45
Iftar it IS
but have no idea about the firni... maybe another name ? Could I have the recipe, please? :)
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raj
Fri, 2018-05-18 14:53
Rula
thanks for correcting me..it is indeed an Iftar i guess where you invite the near and dear ones for a feast..
from what I have heardd while breaking the fast it is a tradition for all to gather and eat from the same plate which I believe is such a wonderful gesture....
as for Firni I even have its picture ..check out
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IcsIPQffBV8
the only complaint I have about Firni is that it is a desert whereas I would love it to be the main course :)
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Fri, 2018-05-18 16:01
lovely you tube
c I said
lovely phirni
served by hirni
milk sugar and seeds
all in
ur title is
intriguing
raj
Fri, 2018-05-18 16:05
thanks Lovedly
for your comment...however this poem is about a much deeper thought than Phirni
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Fri, 2018-05-18 16:34
I know
how thoughts grow
but at times I know
all what many don't know t
he war the battle
the end
the shallowness of all human
they call themselves humane
never believe in em
polishians you
well know 'em
green is the colour
of all environment
that we need
but sad indeed
they cannot on themselves breed
they alone die of cancerous greed
yes indeed
in their deed
you have sounded well
o raj friend
phirni is just a delicacy
chevyvent
Fri, 2018-05-18 15:43
This is an amazing poem and a great way to raise awareness
This is an amazing poem and a great way to raise awareness. Please keep writing because you may be able to help so many kids. Great idea for a poem. Thank you for this wonderful poem.
Beautiful poem - captures the idea of natural beauty so well...poem runs as clever instructions to photograph these children in the backdrop of their surroundings and just the way they are.
Mario Vitale
raj
Fri, 2018-05-18 15:46
Hi Mario
thanks for words of appreciation. I don't know what makes you feel that there are instructions in this poem for kids...i thought there is a much deeper between the lines message her hard for the kids to comprehend...may be it is a cut and paste comment....
thanks all the same..
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Fri, 2018-05-18 15:51
PHIRNI is as sweetest as they say
is A REINDEER
''HIRNI''
a colloquial name
for a lovely girl they tell me
both are sweet and lovely
in the desert
as dessert
and
the ocean
_sublime
wherever raj _ocean
may love
to
live and dine
twill be fine
hirni along with phirni
Rozas are over
or r they
yet!