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Intoxication

Submitted by tyro on Thu, 2020-06-04 07:44

While all the other flowers
were deep in their winter’s
drabness of faded colors,
she shone a full radiance.

She was crowned by a halo
of white hair, its beauty
administered by the dark
swirling streaks within.

And light came to my domain,
again my heart lightened up
to the attraction of a magnet,
or perhaps, the pull of gravity.

And when I stood next to her,
mesmerized in her presence,
the urge came upon me to be
impulsive, taste her sweet lips.

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Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Lavender

Thu, 2020-06-04 08:48

Intoxication

Hello, tyro,
Oh my goodness...so beautiful. So pure and romantic. Beautiful.
L

tyro

Sat, 2020-06-06 04:00

Thank you Lavender

Thank you Lavender
she did have my heart in a whorl

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

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Geezer

Thu, 2020-06-04 11:30

makes one wonder; if indeed you got to taste those lips and maybe the impulse was acted upon; perhaps you got a slap for it? Or was the impulse overcome and you continue to wonder yet? I'm not sure that I would have used the words lightened up, so close to the " light came to my domain", maybe you could say: my heart was drawn, as the attraction of a magnet. Nice stuff! ~ Geezer.
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tyro

Sat, 2020-06-06 04:04