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Inspired by Vincent

Submitted by Teddy15 on Tue, 2020-07-28 11:55

I’m in pursuit of a starry sky

If not to vision such beauty

I may as well die

My spirit is free

I’m an owl of the night

Wings spread fiercely

Now taking flight

Dusk pounds my heart

Light winds keeps me steady

holding paint brush tight

now I am ready

Only me

Only I

And the stars

Gliding through air

Blinded by excitement

Whipped by cold

Encouraging me forward

Into the light of a new alba

Out of starlight

and

Into my next painting.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Vincent van Gogh.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Tue, 2020-07-28 20:21

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starry sky and you bring it into better focus. I like the kind of irregular rhythm to this and the near rhyme feel. I imagine that this is how old Vinnie felt. Nice. ~ Geez.
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Teddy15

Wed, 2020-07-29 02:54

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Once again you have gone deep into this infact
You hit the nail on the head, it was more of a ride on the mind of Vincent, my first title was passenger, but I didn't think it would work

Thank you...Teddy

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Lavender

Tue, 2020-07-28 20:50

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Hi, Teddy,
Very energetic poem, and if I am interpreting correctly, you are painting profusely through the night, encouraged by all the nocturnal elements which bring you to the light of the "new Alba" and your next magnificent masterpiece. "Out of starlight and into my next painting." Love that line! (Do you paint? Seems like you do!)
Thank you!
L

Teddy15

Wed, 2020-07-29 03:00

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What lovely thoughts, I do love painting, I use oil paints but I am, far from talented. I prefer the pen.
This is a ride on the mind of Vincent, I'm so glad you found it.

Thank you...Teddy

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raj

Wed, 2020-07-29 07:55

I liked the flow and progression through and through the poem good start and ending...

If I remember correctly, you were to go in a holiday isn't it?

be well...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Teddy15

Wed, 2020-07-29 08:01

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I'm am delighted you enjoyed this. The month of August I stay home with my family.

Thank you...Teddy

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