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Inside me

How do I push out this evil haze
that takes control of my brain
How do I ignore it's tempting ways
and fight to stoke the pain

Everywhere I'm lured
it leaves destruction in my path
No matter what I do I won't be cured
Putting innocent people in it's wrath

It clouds out my vision my mind is bewitched
I spew out hate with the things that I say
I can't take it back, words can't be fixed
And it goes on like this everyday

I know you can't forgive me
and it's hard to forget
But please try to understand me
Because my words I do regret

Soon after my brain it works to my soul
goes into my body then burrows within
And soon I find myself losing control
I swing with my arms and dig into skin

I scratch and I claw then push you to the ground
Screaming and crying doesn't hurt me
When blood starts to flow I start to calm down
By then you are up and starting to flee

You don't see me cry and start to break down
You don't see me fall and sag to the floor
you just keep on running and don't turn around
While I yell at myself and run for the door

Just know I'm not mad
I don't hate your guts
But this things that's inside me
gets fueled by your cuts

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