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Innsmouth Sonnet

Innsmouth Sonnet by RW
(Thanks eternal to H.P. Lovecraft- IA IA Cthulhu ftagn!)

The flood tide pushed the barriers today
a wraith unseen is shredding its wet rage
the workers see the swells and run away
she's come intent to pull me from my cage

my look gave her permission, come inside
our business old, suppressed, and placed behind
she eddied close and kissed me satisfied
that I had called her back into my mind

The dried up stream bled forth a muddy cask
The gills tore loudly loose along my side
relieved I tore the last strands of my mask
To show the face so long I had to hide

We floated back to shore with certainty
and now we rule the depths eternally

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Structured: Western
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Last few words: 
A Shakespearian sonnet gleaned from two H.P. Lovecraft stories "Dagon" and "A Shadow over Innsmouth" and the Dennis Paoli script for the film "Dagon".
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It humbles me to know you think I even did justice to his work. I've read every published word (fiction and essay) that he's ever done. He infused me with that cosmic darkness in his work that I find so effective. He explains it in detail in Supernatural horror in literature: a long essay that's published in book form. Thanks so much, you've made my day.

Ron
Blue Demon77

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

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