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Inheritance

In the end
gold and silver will not last
but true knowledge
inherited by the living
will shine in glory
beyond this mortal life.

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I don't think you need the commas as it reads more as one continuous thought.
Just how I read it.

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How very true, nice piece. Regards Roscoe....

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Its good to hear from you again.

Alid

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