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The Imprudent Wager (April Contest)

I'll wager my man drubs the bout,
I'll wager my cards win;
I'll bet you think, without a doubt,
That gambling is a sin.

I'll risk my bottom dollar
That all the good and wise,
Or any learned scholar,
Despise the gaming guise.

I'll wager my horse takes the race
And I enhance my stake;
He'll run and run to gain a place,
The winning post to make.

But I'll wager you your sparkling smile
You'll remember that first time
You held your children's hand a while
As they were in their prime.

I'll wager you a candy kiss,
I firmly guess it's so ~
I'll bet you won't remember this...
You ever letting go!

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Sorry couldn't keep the chatting. My net connection keeps getting me out.
I wanted to say that I read this. I really liked the theme. The title works for me and I thought your verses flow well from the beginning to the end
Best wishes

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Thanks for coming in. Thank you also for your valuable critique, which I appreciate.
I'm pleased that you enjoyed this piece ~ I hope that it is quite true in your life.
Please drop by the chat room again soon. I think that you need to be there with the other guys, they all understand when your connection comes and goes. It is quite important to talk to other members real time. Everyone loved your visit so don't stay away too long.

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now I figure you thought I was clueless as to what "drubs" and "bout" mean, right? ('ll wager my man wins the match.)
Well, my mom, Mrs. K. raised no dummy, lol, and she kept me away from wagering, although a friendly card game was allowed. Alan, you wrote a clever poem and I'd wager it will run neck to neck with the best entry for the April contest.
Jerry

Good to hear from you. I know that you, of all people, will know what drubs the bout means. Now it's my turn ~ I have no idea what a FRIENDLY card game is. I wrote this a long time ago and it fits the 24 line limit so not my favourite of all writes. Your mom, Mrs. K, was a very wise lady I think, pass on my regards next time you are thinking of her.

I had a friend owned a cabaret club (Roy Orbison met his wife there) here in Yorkshire. He was born on the road in a showman's caravan in 1925. His Father was a bare knuckle fighter.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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Great poem, Alan. I'd only remove But in strophe 4, L1. Not necessary, unless it undoes your rhythm pattern. Enjoyed, it flows smoothly and has wonderful imagery in a conversation mode.

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for you comment Gracy. I'm pleased that you liked my poem. Probably not a contest winner but I though that I would enter it anyway, It's been around a while and never had an outing.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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well, the definition of "FRIENDLY" can vary: Strip-poker can be a very, very "friendly" but risky game, but I have never been allowed to partake in such high stakes. In a friendly card game, such as I like, no money is wagered, or maybe just tokens in form of nickles or pennies. So, you can see--I'm quite the gambler, lol. Take care, Jerry

the banter with you Jerry. Glad to see that you behave yourself at the card table. I have never participated in such things also, though I have tried strip solitaire.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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that it's a sure bet that it will be in the top of the pile. Nicely done. ~ Geezer.
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Geezer. It's a sure bet that you will never see them again.
Thanks for calling and also for your company in real time ~ a good chat room.

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Kind regards, Alan
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