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Imagine this

I’m standing on a tree top
high above with the birds
they’re singing to me
I feel lucky because
the branch is strong enough to hold me
When I look down
I see the bark rising up to tickle me
with its many arms
will vertigo get me ?
If it doesn’t I shall wait patiently
to find out what will happen next
Will I manage to keep the balance on my feet?
or fall towards my destiny?

I’m still waiting…

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maybe instead of in my feet try this the balance of my feet ?
this poem is filled with metaphor leaving many interpretations good work

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

I didn't even see it! Thank you spot on as always. You have really been kind to help will change straight away.

Thank you...Teddy

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I like nice and simple life poems

I appreciate your kind words

Thank you...Teddy

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Hello, Teddy,
When I read this, it feels like a "go big or go home" choice to me. It's lovely, and so far, pretty safe up in the tree, But it's - up in a tree with nowhere else to go. I really like the intensity you bring here.
Thank you!
L

I just wrote this today. I am thrilled you have seen so much in here. I really appreciate you all.

Thank you...Teddy

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being up in a tree with the birds. Your words sway with the breeze as you look down and wonder how much higher can you go? Nice feel to this. ~ Geezer.
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Come to Chat on the Darkside
every other Saturday night 8pm to ?
Bring your dark and delicious work
to show.

You are always most welcome here, I was wondering if someone may ask and you did! I can honestly say I don't know where this came from I just sat at my computer yesterday morning and wrote it. I was actually trying to understand the logic of this myself. It's been a very hard few months in every way so it might just be because things are slowly getting better and am relieved. I really appreciate your visits

Thank you...Teddy

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A double post

Thank you...Teddy

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I was awarded once
ever since I post as a poetic dunce
no offense
not many scan
a dead man
poetry's imagery alone may
besides Teddy 15
wish was 16

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