rula this is an awesome write

apart from the personification of the flowers, which one can visualise very easily, the ‘s’ alliteration really adds to the gentleness of the write

and ‘all the words go silent’ – also personifying words is a magical touch

I really felt myself swaying with the flowers’ smiles and hearing hearts' song, and the sudden silence following was palpable. very effectively done - i think the continuation of the 's' alliteration had something to do with this effect

so simply written, but such great imagery

love judy
xxx

Is the flower the desert Rose?? lol
Very well done and as Judy said small.
You were short and I was definitely small.
See you in the next round,
Yours Ian.T

You have now shown why I should use personification more lol. And also packed a lot into a short poem...........stan

it has all the profound qualities of short poetry.

But my pet peeve, I hate centred poetry. It should be aligned left unless you have a bloody good reason for doing otherwise.

But is personification restricted only to "human traits"? How would you describe a device that gives traits of other animals to non-living objects. And vice versa.
example: "Her beaming face" or "The window cawed as it turned on the old hinge."

I hope I'm making sense. I can barely get the stuff I'm writing here.

beautiful alliteration with the ‘s’ sound, which I always find a gentle one

and this whole write is gentle, set off with the image of the flowers smiling

‘swing’ and ‘sway’, movement words using the ‘s’ sound again affected my senses – I close my eyes – I swing and sway

and the ending – that feeling of awe, that has no room for words

a thought for the finish – it does change the context slightly
‘then all sound
goes silent.’

but that is just a thought, as your finish is amazing and in no need of change

love judy
xxx

The imagery evoked by this poem was that of a calm, peaceful ending. The flowers come to me as a sign of ending life, or a hope of beginning life. In this poem, it assumes a meaning closer to the former.

The "joyous" bits of the poem come with the first to lines that end in a smile and a swing. They're like a brief ray of sunshine.

Then the poem quickly falls with a "sways", which aptly is a short line. It's like changing the key of a melody from a lighter to a darker one.

The last two lines wrap the poem up neatly. I liked her use of "words", as it comes to me as more related to a poet's life.

The very last line, also two words long, echoes the third one, and the feeling of finality ends there.

The whole poem is like running a scale and ending on the tonic. It's final and complete.

I choose not to read the other critiques until after my own is submitted. I want the critique to be purely my own processes.

I find the poem erotic, or more exactly I find that what Rula is personifying is an object of active want. Her single reaction is for her "heart to swing and sway" when the flowers smile. I see a honeybee.

Ron

I LOVE YOUR VOICE!

Ron

I haven't yet read all the comments here, but want to add a wee note myself.

This is like the haiku type of poetry short
with a whole meaning in a few words.

Flowers smile,
my heart sways,
all words are silent

could even cut out all I suppose, but that's more like a haiku's essence of meaning.
Not to belittle the validity of your poem as it is, oh no, I love it, and will cherish it
as it is Rula.

where yours is full of happiness and joy at life and flowers ...
the one I made is full of other meanings maybe,
personal experiences hidden may come to life,
according to who reads it.

Love to you dear Rula.
Ann