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Imagery Stanza

Centuries worn into bleak landscape
ancient markings roughly hewn,
the cutting stone
still holds a deathly charm.

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I still can see a beautiful face regardless the wrinkles anx the furrows that years have carved deeply.
How far am I dear Jane?

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I'm happy if that's what you see Rula.
Let's see if anyone else sees what I was trying to describe, before I say what it is.
Jx

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It matters not that we see the same as you have, just that we see something other than factual words..
This seems to be a picture of a bare cliff where the ages have worn away the pretence of a cover and laid bare the years that have passed.
Also where the ancients have left their marks in the stones for all to see.
I have seen many stones carved by prehistory people and to me they are a treasure.
A very good write for one that doesn't understand what it's about lol
Yours as always Ian..xx

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I disagree.
A poet uses imagery to help paint a picture or convey meaning. If the reader doesn't understand, or misses the poet's message, then the imagery isn't working as intended.
There are poems where interpretation is open, so your argument holds good in some instances.
In my stanza, I want you to use the imagery to build the picture. You have some of it, but add a bit of Druid, you might see what I do then.
Jx
Ps. Where oh where did you get the idea I didn't know what imagery is? Surely you've read enough of my poetry by now to ascertain I have a modest grip on its implications.

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Being from that great county of the druids, can't recall us killing anyone in sacrifice at Stonehenge, we would use the odd animal but never be as the Aztecs, and there are very few carvings in the stones people wouldn't dare we would send the wrath of our ancient Gods on their heads..
The ref to not understanding Imagery was from these two bits in comments from the other day:-

Still don't get the difference between...
indirect imagery and straight imagery. Am I that stupid?
W. H. Snow
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jane210660
Thu, 2017-06-29 20:57
No
it's something the more I think about, the less I understand.
We can be in the naughty corner together Wesley - she says grinning.
You gave the imagery of not understanding imagery or maybe I interpreted it wrong if so SORRY!!
But the poems I gave are still lovely, not that I read much poetry except here,
Take care and know you are in our thoughts,
Yours Ian and the Children xx

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In responding to Wesley, who is struggling with indirect imagery, I said it was something the more I thought about the less I understood, meaning it's sometimes better not to overthink things.
I think Druidic influences extend a bit beyond Stonehenge. In fact Stonehenge never even crossed my mind. We had them here in Yorkshire and indeed they were documented by the Romans in the early centuries. Human sacrifice at Druid hands was also documented by the Romans. Now the Romans were not above using propaganda for their own ends, so it may well be fiction. My rock is a real rock about 10 miles from where I live, called The Druids Altar. It is in an area rich in Bronze Age settlement, with many existing cup and ring marks still visible. It is also on a Roman road and has been recorded by a visiting Roman as a dire place used for human sacrifice.
Fact or fiction, it makes great inspiration for poetic material.
Again, a quick google of Druids Alter brings up a host of leads, all suggesting sacrifice, and Stonehenge doesn't even get a look in.
I studied Roman Britain, and the British Bronze and Iron ages for my degree, so am on home ground here.
Take care young Ian and may the ghosts of dead poets and long gone druids bring light to your poetic soul.
Jx

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So SORRY for misreading your comments on direct imagery and indirect imagery between yourself and Wesley.
My main mentor has taken me to task for not reading correctly
I is scared, and going to retreat to my cave and carve some images on the walls, see you later.. "Is I forgived"??
Yours as always Ian..xxx

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I know that shocks most of you lol. But without reading others' comments (so they won't alter my vision) that you have described a ruined artifact in a desert or other desolate place. Could as well be a monument. Now this displays an almost perfect amount of inferred imagery. It whets the curiosity about the exact meaning which leads one to wanting to read more and Not just for clarification which would likely come later in the poem

You are bob on Stan.
Exactly what I was describing.
Jx

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