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Wayfaring alone in moorland's domain,
Walking along with the dead of the night;
Trekking, safely, a well-trodden pathway,
Suddenly spotting a beckoning light.

A warm and welcoming distant beacon,
A clear, bright feature to guide me ahead;
I followed the pharos with cheery store
Allowing to let myself to be lead.

But then, alas, I met jack-o'-lantern
Impishly, carelessly leading astray,
Steering my footway nearer a quagmire
Fogged in the haze of the mist of the day.

With mischief afoot, deception I see....
You, will-o'-the-wisp, surely couldn't fool me!


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Structured: Western
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I don't have any criticisms to offer. Good luck in the contest! Make sure that you use the drop down to designate your poem as part of the contest! Oh, and maybe next to the title; [Sonnet contest].
~ Geezer.

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Gee for taking time to read and comment. The drop down tells me there are no contests running at the moment but I look forward to submitting things in the future.

Kind regards, Alan.

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what a delightful pom this was gave me pause for thought read more into it that was perhaps not meant

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. 'delightful' is a ......delightful word. The read is really just a trip over the moors near where I live in Yorkshire, England, though I hope it encourages readers to beware of trickery as they roam through life. I am flattered that you thought you read more into it than was intended. That means it was at least half-decent if it got you thinking! Please read into it what you will lynn (I hope it wasn't too spooky for you).

Kind regards, Alan

Critique is a compliment
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Every time I try to write a sonnet it is obvious I'm counting syllable and thus reads forced. Thus I just sit around and envy those who Can write them well.......stan

To make them flow naturally and still count syllable, you have to work at it but it helps to write other things at the same time and keep returning to your sonnet.
You don't actually say if you think this is a good sonnet or otherwise (or not even a sonnet at all - rhyme structure).

Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan

Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan

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