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Ifan not all have read so now its new title is Mefan

Stan the scribbler
is always a dribbler,
he reads some of mine
whenever...
but neither is he on my fan list
nor am on his
after all with bosses
one can’t be
too pally

Ian, comes next
after his heavenly rest,
He is my very best
for I’m a bard for him,
I thought small bard
Shakespeare!
till he clarified,
no, one who sells
what ever one tells…

Judy, is an Aussie
a Piscean,
a great nurse is she
and when she has tranquilized her patients,
she commits no crime,
as she then composes
lovely poetry
and
edits mine

Cat, she is an established poet
and
she has books to her credit
she says lovely things about me,
but never comments on my verse,
else to be fair,
she will only have to curse

''Loved you know nothing
of emotional poetry...''

once upon a time was Shirley
I still miss her dearly
to me she is like a Queen,
never now to be seen
since now she’s married

Esker, he is in the wilderness
at all times
far above the maddening crowd,
none know what he commits
and sure enough
'tis poetry he vomits…
unlimited and realistic…

once when it snows
Snow
Can come in
and he is epicurial we all know
since I don’t read him
he too now does me forgo

Jess used his leather
to flatter
to hit me like a poetic hunter
he was kind
in being harsh
and
now even he doesn’t bother.

Well if anyone feels left out
let me know
about you
I shall shower
words that glow…

I left out ma'am Ann,
on purpose
she is too good
and
deserves a standing ovation
from a standing poet
some one

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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it's because of the workshops. All the energy for working and improving our poetry is being used in the workshops. Is this a bad thing?

You really must consider that Neopoet has always been designed and intended to be a place for poets to improve their craft, not just post poems and get compliments.

I know people are leaving because of this, and maybe they should. Others are joining and staying because of it, and that is definitely good.

We are in unstable times, which is absofuckinglutely definitely good.

Remember every member has a say, we are a democracy, through these crucial times we will find a balance where poets not participating in workshops will get critical feedback, but you have to work for it too.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

coined

absofuckinglutely

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No one enjoys a child whining incessantly.
This poem has potential, some of it very good,
cut out the beginning and get down to the poem.

I usually don't have anything to say to you,
I hope this is at least honest.
I am no scholar who can do other than say how i feel,
others have the knowledge of the forms of poetry,
they are the best ones to help us all.

Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

and qualifying me as a child ....

but i don't whine
as I an not a horsey poet
may be donkeyish
one

No one enjoys a child whining incessantly.

thanks to Jess
this volley was really meant for me.

more later
I shall comply

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Don't feel you are alone. I think the summer doldrums may have hold of a lot of us. I know my present lack of time (that damned "real world" is demanding a lot lately). But things come in waves and I expect ere long a bit more commentary will be forthcoming on everybody's poetry..................stan

self portraying stream
so just pass a direction ...
no one will post a second poem
down the Thames,
in the stream ,
till ones last post has been seen
by at least one
other than Stan
and
only Stan will clear the signal
for another post.

MORE POETS WILL BE READ
and
not the limited few experts ...
Howz zat Stan ?

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i don't tranquilize my guests - i wouldn't waste good drugs on them. oh no, i save them for myself :)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

the correct word for sedation,
could you help me change this word please
Judy ,
thanks

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lol - 'tranquilized' is fine loved
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

tranquilized

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Thanks for the very nice things you have written about me. I will try harder to comment more on your content of your work. I have noticed your work getting better and reaching new heights. I haven't been around for awhile due to an illness. I am getting better now as the bug is going away. You be careful not to catch that one it is a butt kicker.

love, Cat (& eddy)

*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

you are my valued poetic friend,
without your kind and kindness
survival... would be like the
Titanic

my laps top does scan...
for virus now

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