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If You Ever Change your Love

She felt next to a sizzling death.
Was this the good Godly earth.
If you ever change the petals mind.
He looked at her changing face so
kind right form formalized.
Like a change love needed
Her heart pleaded with red hues
Another plant beloved seeded

Set her mind free butterflies
A village greener lies?
Like colors of meringue pie
The men looked dapper with their
"Starbucks Tie"
A brighter Vue one specific clue
Did she pay her dues
Like an Owl how it hoots.
It's her again in her boots.
Like a lady needs to obey.
Adam and eve fruits on her tray.
If you ever change your love
Like a stray lost animal
The good earth plenty of minerals
He wanted so much to be loved
A big change of hands
Well suited hands met mine all gloved.
If you ever change your love
Sometimes a change is good to be loved

"Editorial Write"
"Historical Website"
"Pictorial Aphrodite"

That positive change from a good book page
But God! I smell the flowers they talk to me "Sage"
What will be coming my way
I need security the Kings speech of humanity
Today was not the day. I need to pray.
If you ever change your love
I hope you stay I won't have it any other way.

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I think the title is unique and well fit your theme. The rhythm in the tempo is slows down a bit.
For example these lines “The one thing he wanted to change
her fur the in the spur of her change
He was allergic different range
Where there's a will”.
Your formatting is untraditional for Poetry style as far as stanzas go with all that said, I liked it.

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Keep up the good work

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

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