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IF MEN WERE GOD

The safety of man kind would have been in trouble
But thank God the men were not, for if they were
There wouldn't have been a survivor existing
The rage of men are so severe against their foes

If men were God all would be buying life
We would line up in queue dragging line
Men's intentions always wanted to dominate
Control and exercise their selfish ambitions

If men were God, we would all labeled the culprits
For whenever power is bestowed on them
They felt it's intoxication and their bragging culture
Will now posses their sense of reasoning

If they knew what God's purpose all about
In making them to be the head of their families
They would have succumb to divine authority
And be loyal, humble, and respect their wives

Since inception of civilization, men began to rule
The rule of law is under siege and abuse of power
The Judiciary here is already hijacked by nepotism
The cabals now the living leech and stiff-necked

They've literally ruined the nation from its glory
Our socio- economic system has been shrinking
The mountain of poverty, banditry, kept growing
Yet the state actors only winks their eye in isolation

If men were God, they would've erased the cloud
And blanket the earth with Darkness of evil
Men's instinct is always showing off
And be recognized as essential figure

Their reign into the corridor of power
Has stimulated their hearts and minds
Into men of integrity and uprightness but they
Are not, their service is a square peg in a round hole

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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Hi, Jackweb,
I believe I'm understanding this piece correctly - that mankind's ego, ignorance and arrogance are destructive. This is a thought provoking poem. There is much here. I'll be back to read again.
Thank you!
L

You really nailed it in a few words. Your commentary means a lot to me. Thanks a bunch for reading through. Ok, I'm waiting for your second return.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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provoking thoughts with this poem is the concept of man being a god, or God. Your poem has many detailed circumstances and examples. Sadly, I think you've captured the idea of what would happen. Mankind has a hard time handling power in a humble way.
L

You have brought it to a final conclusion. Excellent review! You deserve a class of wine to chill off! Much appreciated for your time here.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Cheers!
L

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