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IF:

IF:
WAR is best served RAW,
The LIVE appearance of the world is EVIL,
“To have WON” is only appreciated in the NOW,
a RAM is the grass’ MAR,
MALI has the same energy state as LIMA,
a WOLF can keep up with its activity FLOW,
LAUD really share similar characters with DUAL,
a BAT can keep a TAB on its prey,
moving through the RAIL of life would make me a LIAR,
my ‘i WAS’ actually referred to my ‘i SAW’,
dinosaurs ARE existing in our ERA,
a MUG could only be made out of a GUM,
a certain PAT can TAP into the potentials of his subordinates,
a PART of crime is a TRAP over innocence,
YAM can fully be harvested in the month of MAY
one could ZAP available energies in la-PAZ,
the TIP of an abyss is a sub-set of the bottom-less PIT,
in a POOL of water lies its LOOP of ripples
one could RAP her way to be at PAR with the opulent,
OPRAH, don’t you think we need to inform HARPO about these?
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Very smart, yet I feel it does not commit to ideas.
Would you agree?

cheers,
Jess
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Who are your favourite poets? Who would you cite as influences? Do you have a preference for any particular forms or styles?

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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