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From the ICU

Pillows pack the pain
Dizziness controls the brain
Blue curtains domain.

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Mark. Have been in the icu for a couple of days after a bad chest-pain. Much better now. Editted as suggested.
Thank you for your kind visit.

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Mark( a second heart attack ) Hope all is better with you now. I never thought of the hospital as a good place, EVEN IF I need it.
Lol..I like human pin cushion

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both of you please take best care.
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Dear Rula
In my mind you are a symbol of goodness. I have witnessed your kind heart so many times.
My your God hold you dear.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

dear friends. Your kind words make me feel much better indeed no matter what!
Appreciate it!

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I hope you feel better, and look at you, creative soul! you managed to give a poetic spin to your pain. Congratulations on having a perfect Zen reaction to the unfortunate event.
I wish you a blessed spring days and full recovery.

IRiz

I wanted to record/date the moment even that it IS as you call it an unfortunate event.
Bless you.
Thanks for the kind visit

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They always ask how you are whether at Dr.s office or hospital. I always reply I'm not excellent or I'd not be here lol. Like your Haiku......stan

agree Stan. Hope you are feeling better.
Thanks for the visit.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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I thought this is senryu. Now I'm confused. Which is the one which is about nature and which is about human? Maybe you can help refresh my memory abit.

Alid

Great to hear from you. It's been a long time since I last read you. I hope all is good.
Yes, I believe the haiku is meant for the nature and the senryu for the human. I've changed the title without referring to any of these. Just expressing the feeling of the moment.
Thank you for the kind visit.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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