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I Won't Complain

I’m not going to complain
That my clothes are too tight
And my legs are just sacks of cellulite.

And I won't grizzle and whine
About overstretched skin
The bags or the sags hung under my chin.

I won't whimper or cry
About varicose veins
Viciously throbbing and giving me pains.

I won't snivel or sob
That my vision is blurred
My hips disjoint and I can’t hear a word.

I suppose it’s natural
To be riddled with gout
For my bones to creak and my teeth to drop out.

I shan’t breath a word or whinge
That I dribble and leak
I’m losing my mind and my outlook is bleak.

No! I won't moan or complain
Or fly into a rage
They tell me this is just part of old age.

Why should I weep or wail
When at least I’m alive
The only thing is I’m just fifty five.

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Nice to see you. Don't worry it was meant to be funny Shirl - I haven't got gout and my hips don't disjoint - the rest is true, but I count myself lucky I've reached the age I have still in relative good health. Just thought I'd write something a bit light hearted - weird sense of humour. he he.

Great to hear from you - sorry I'm not around much, grandchildren have got swine flu!!

Keep safe - I recommend you keep clear of the swine fu.

Love Mand xxxxxxxxxx

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the problem with complaining to other people is that they then expect you to listen to Their complaints lol.This learned from 56 years experience. By the way, what in the name of Neptune's blue balls is "whinge "?..........stan

True - and listening to their complaints could take along time! Ha ha

Good to hear from you Stan

Love Mand

P.s How's your health? Ha ha

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Good to see you. I hope you are o.k!! True - I remember wanting to be older - it seemed so exciting to be able to do adult things. Internal peace and wisdom - more valuable than jewels and the ablility to see life crystal clear - beautiful - all of which are reflected in your poems.

Thank you for your observation with regard tercet! I've wrtten approx 35 poems - I think possibly it is my comfort zone!

Thank you for pointing out the typo - been corrected!

I appreciate you reading and commenting Amalzamani - It's always good to hear form you.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

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If I have made you smile, nothing else matters. So I am happy.

With love hugs and blessings

Mand xxxxxxxxx

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this is hilarious.

I loved it and so did my wife.

I won't crit the missing apostrophe in 'won't'...oh shit! I just did.



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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

Kind of you come take the time to read and comment! We all need a laugh sometimes!! he he

Ohh thanks for letting me know about the apostrophe - Well I am "losing my mind". Lol

Glad you both liked it.


Love Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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but that would hurt. I'm too dam young to be this old. As long as we have a mind, We can live and enjoy. Take Care. huey

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