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I wish

Submitted by Jaq Cee on Tue, 2013-05-14 15:05

I wish I had
x-ray eyes
to see straight
through the
best disguise

I wish I had a heart
of steel--
you can't hurt if
you don't
feel

I wish my soul was
dark not light
maybe then I'd
hide from
sight

I wish my nature
was less
forgiving
for then I could
be anger
driven

I wish my skin
was rough
and tough
because for now
I've had
enough

Style / type: 
Free verse
Last few words: 
I enjoy rhyming free-verse most of all.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

BelindaR

Wed, 2013-05-15 03:14

I like the poem and the flow. I think the short lines really help with that. I like the forgiving you - don't change your beautiful heart!

Ian.T

Wed, 2013-05-15 03:20

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Fun write keep them coming, though making your soul dark well there is no way to do this lol. Even Killer has a sense of humour La La
Yours, Sparrow..
Ian.T here, a great welcome to Neopoet I hope your stay with us will be a lovely experience..

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Jaq Cee

Wed, 2013-05-15 12:39

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Thanks to all who have commented, it means a lot. Looking forward to 'meeting' you all :) xxx

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BlueDemon77

Sat, 2013-05-18 11:31

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There is a lot to like about this. Your candor and the simplicity with which you express yourself are refreshing. Some of us (speaking only of me, actually) get so caught up in the tangle of form or the ever dreaded 'clever' that our meaning somehow is diluted in the mix. You said it all and it's out there free. I do agree with Beau, however. The thing that has given me the most ability to heal has been a tight grip on forgiveness of those who hurt me. I don't know who it was that once told me: "resentment is a poison you drink to kill someone else". I've found this true in my life.

Thanks Jaq, hope to read more from you soon!

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

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