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I will be glad

So many things have happened that makes me depressed
Making me feel like a victim and an oppressed
But today I have decided to be glad
No matter what happens I refuse to be sad

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May I suggest that in the line
Making me feel like a victim and an oppressed [the word 'an' is unnecessary]
either
Making me feel like a victim and oppressed
or
Making me feel like a victim and an oppressed being

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Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

thanks

benevolence

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thanks

benevolence

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