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I WE THEE

I'm nearing 83
may soon be joining
those in the universe
who now with each other
distantly silently converse

this verse is about those
who have become ashes
else are buried comfortably
six feet beneath

gradually moths will have a feed
may take years
who knows

Do we
or
yee

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

The poem is a great one. Emotional and truly relatable. Love the use of "ye".

@funmzy

I admire the solemnity of this piece. I am seventy-one just this last February 18th I turned . bless you.

*hugs, Cat

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though belated
you have a long way

Since you r a PISCES
it's a dual sign
hence _edyx

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actually I am an Aquarian on the cusp of Pisces. I have the blessings of both signs.
last night I fell down while backing up I tripped on the wooden strip that holds down the carpet. I twisted my right knee and hit my head very hard. Steven dialed 911 and both two police officers came and two ambulance attendants. they took my vitals and got me on my feet again. I was very lucky!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

do recover soon in old age one has to take care of such injury. Glad 911 helped you tc Cats

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