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I Want You To Know

Before being sandwiched
in every day's mundane chores,
those frivolous issues, and some more,
I come to read you,

I smile.

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Good one but needs more..push the accelerator and continue to drive...you know what i mean?

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

I know what you mean, you might be right, but sometimes it comes to you like this. Just a thought and you like it as is , no more no less. May be I should have posted it rather as a blog. But I appreciate your thoughts and the visit.
Thank you.

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i think it's perfect. it made ME smile :) nice little write.

mag

On someone's face every morning, then my mission is accomplished :)
Thank you for your visit and the comment.

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would you?

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Would never like to go against whatever suggested for improvement, especially when it comes from my dear mentor, but I don't have anything to add to this little piece.
It is how it is intended. If I have got your question right sir.

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like this and Al's recent 'Small Stories'.

I did not understand the line
I come to read you,
could you clarify?

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you. I am happy you like it.
I think Mand's comment said it all

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I'd go with Jess on this one. :). + it's a nice gesture to someone special!

Love to you

Mand xxxx

I think you got me there. :)
Thank you dear for your clever comment. (((Winks)))

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its been ages
at me
since you smiled

You can never guess.

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are not lost
fortuitous tidings
spelled to an ear of
the soul
bring blossoms

than you!

Not sure how I missed your comment

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